1st Draft Narrative: Magical Playtime.

Today Room 1 Literacy Class is doing a Narrative that you could pick your own picture to write about. Here is the picture that I have picked.


But first here's a brain storm of what my story is going to be about:


Here is my writing:

One normal Thursday it was very sunny and I knew what that meant, I had to play
with my little sister (Aleyria) she is so cute, but she can be annoying. Every sunny day
we always play together but some days it can get very cranky. When I woke up to a
wonderful morning my little sister was already up, getting ready. When I went down
stairs she was having breakfast feeling so happy that we could play today. She asked
me if I was ready too, but I just said “not yet Aleyria, but nearly”. I went back upstairs to
brush my teeth and wash my face then after that I went straight to my bedroom.
My sister was right there on my bed waiting for me, and I knew she would do that to
me straight away.

Then I asked her “what are you doing Aleyria” I said in a cranky voice, “nothing
wrong I hope” she said back to me. I looked at her for a few long seconds, but she
wouldn't move.

So I walked out making my way back downstairs for breakfast. Now what should I
have ( thinking to myself in my head ), well today I should just have toast with butter on it.
This kind of meal just gives me good vibes while I eat it when i’m looking outside.

But suddenly I heard someone come down stair and of course it was my sister,
“now are you ready” she said as I was doing my dishes. “Yes, now I am Aleyria”
ok then let’s go play, and we left to go outside.

I was wondering if any of my friends were busy, so I gave them a call.
But firstly I rang Nevayah my best friend, she has just started at our school ever
since last year and she is so kind. When I rang her up she was still sleeping in her bed,
so I asked if she was doing anything today.

As I asked her what she was doing today she asked me back “are these one of the days,
that we play with your sister again Paige”, ohh yes I said back with a long sigh.
I looked back at my sister and she started coming over to me, what are you doing Paige,
oh you know just talking to my friend Nevayah.

Ok just wait one minute she said with a cranky angry voice, you are talking to your
friend instead of playing with me, umm I will be there soon ok I said back.
As I went back to the phone I talked to her very quickly, ok Vayah ( that her nickname )  
can you please! come over and play with us I asked her as fast as I could, ok fine she
said with a long voice.

Bye bye I said, see ya later I guess she said back.
Looking back at my sister I could tell that she was very bored,
so then I went over to her and played with her until Nevayah could come.
Also thinking about my other friend/cousin Neveah if she could come over and play too,
so I gave her a rang. But all of a sudden she was already walking past my house and
she saw me and Aleyria playing together. After she walked past she shouted
“hey Paigey ( that’s my nickname )”, oh hey come and come come and play, ok.
TO BE CONTINUED, Next Week!. . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

WALT: write for a specific purpose and audience

Task Description: This is a narrative writing about the Magical Playtime adventure that we are going to have. Hope you enjoy reading the first bit of my story, ( the next bit will be posted on next week). May god bless you and your family.

Bye bye