Magical Playtime Draft 2.

Draft 2: Magical Playtime

Ok back to the story. . . . . when she came over to Aleyria and I, that was the time when Nevayah came too. Once they both arrived we decided to play Aleyria’s favourite game, Family, she loved to be the little sister because she was already one in real life. A little bit later it was time for a snack, but before we could go Aleyria saw something weird on the road. “Be Careful”, I said as she came back with a puzzled face, Aleyria was so excited to see what it was. I looked closely with my eyes opened wide and when all of us gather together we all touched it,suddenly something went wrong. . . . . .

We landed somewhere we have never been before, there was a tree with a door at the bottom of it. We all went through and it led us to a beautiful lake with butterflies all around. Our minds were frozen for a few seconds and we all looked at each other weirdly. Once all of us has looked at each other for a bit, we were so confused and scared at the same. But for Aleyria she was already screaming as soon as we got there, the toy that we touched was on the ground in the middle of us. When we all looked at it we thought that the toy brought us here and that we did not know how to get back home.

After a while we figured out straight a way that if we could touch the toy together again we could get back home. So we all gathered again and we touched the toy. . .

“Yay!,” my sister shouted, “well that wasn't too bad,” I said. Maybe this toy is magical Nevayah thought in her mind, “what do we do with it” I asked everyone. Aleyria suggested that should keep it and put it somewhere safe, “I think that is a good Idea” I said to her.

That was the day we had Magical Playtime and when we were all together having fun. As Nevayah and Neveah went home, Aleyria and I went in the basement and put the magical toy there. It was the greatest day of our lives we both thought in our head.

“Girls!,” our mum shouted out, “it’s time for dinner!”

“Ok,” we said.

The End

Task Description: This is the 2nd Draft of my writing from last week and this was the last post of this story. My writing is called Magical Playtime, read the first Draft then the second Draft after that. Hope you enjoy reading the last bit of my story. May god bless you and your family make sure to be happy and safe.

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1st Draft Narrative: Magical Playtime.

Today Room 1 Literacy Class is doing a Narrative that you could pick your own picture to write about. Here is the picture that I have picked.


But first here's a brain storm of what my story is going to be about:


Here is my writing:

One normal Thursday it was very sunny and I knew what that meant, I had to play
with my little sister (Aleyria) she is so cute, but she can be annoying. Every sunny day
we always play together but some days it can get very cranky. When I woke up to a
wonderful morning my little sister was already up, getting ready. When I went down
stairs she was having breakfast feeling so happy that we could play today. She asked
me if I was ready too, but I just said “not yet Aleyria, but nearly”. I went back upstairs to
brush my teeth and wash my face then after that I went straight to my bedroom.
My sister was right there on my bed waiting for me, and I knew she would do that to
me straight away.

Then I asked her “what are you doing Aleyria” I said in a cranky voice, “nothing
wrong I hope” she said back to me. I looked at her for a few long seconds, but she
wouldn't move.

So I walked out making my way back downstairs for breakfast. Now what should I
have ( thinking to myself in my head ), well today I should just have toast with butter on it.
This kind of meal just gives me good vibes while I eat it when i’m looking outside.

But suddenly I heard someone come down stair and of course it was my sister,
“now are you ready” she said as I was doing my dishes. “Yes, now I am Aleyria”
ok then let’s go play, and we left to go outside.

I was wondering if any of my friends were busy, so I gave them a call.
But firstly I rang Nevayah my best friend, she has just started at our school ever
since last year and she is so kind. When I rang her up she was still sleeping in her bed,
so I asked if she was doing anything today.

As I asked her what she was doing today she asked me back “are these one of the days,
that we play with your sister again Paige”, ohh yes I said back with a long sigh.
I looked back at my sister and she started coming over to me, what are you doing Paige,
oh you know just talking to my friend Nevayah.

Ok just wait one minute she said with a cranky angry voice, you are talking to your
friend instead of playing with me, umm I will be there soon ok I said back.
As I went back to the phone I talked to her very quickly, ok Vayah ( that her nickname )  
can you please! come over and play with us I asked her as fast as I could, ok fine she
said with a long voice.

Bye bye I said, see ya later I guess she said back.
Looking back at my sister I could tell that she was very bored,
so then I went over to her and played with her until Nevayah could come.
Also thinking about my other friend/cousin Neveah if she could come over and play too,
so I gave her a rang. But all of a sudden she was already walking past my house and
she saw me and Aleyria playing together. After she walked past she shouted
“hey Paigey ( that’s my nickname )”, oh hey come and come come and play, ok.
TO BE CONTINUED, Next Week!. . . . . . . . . . . . . . .

WALT: write for a specific purpose and audience

Task Description: This is a narrative writing about the Magical Playtime adventure that we are going to have. Hope you enjoy reading the first bit of my story, ( the next bit will be posted on next week). May god bless you and your family.

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