Today I saw an ad about a boy who couldn't wait for Christmas. In the ad the boy couldn't wait for Christmas and he had been waiting for the time to go faster. He was Impatient and disappointed and he had this box with little cube holes which he ate every single day. The boy couldn't wait so he tried to use magic but it didn't work and he was fed up. Then when he woke up in the morning he got a mountain of presents but he ignored them and he got his parents present. He got it out of the cupboard and gave them the present. He was so happy.I was surprised because when Christmas comes we got to open our presents from Santa.
When it's Christmas I will get my mum a box of perfume because she likes perfume to make her smell nice and I’d buy my dad some new chucks because are his favourite shoes and to make him look cool.
Nice picture and writing Paige.
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Hi Paige I really like your writing very much your work is great keep up the great work you put a lot of good things into you writing and I love your picture of the presents and the Christmas tree keep up the good work you are doing very great.
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Hi Paige I love how you ad detail to your writing and picture .
ReplyDeleteNice writing Paige. I love how you used some colourful words (fed up, impatient, disappointed, surprised). Next time try to show how you understand how the people might be feeling when you write.
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